Your current sales
copy, flyer, or ad not making any sales?
“Hire me, a 6-figure producing copywriter to
tell you what’s wrong with it & I promise you’ll start making more money
“The best part for YOU is that I’m willing
to do it
all for a tiny fraction of my normal fee”
Dear business owner,
Average copy doesn’t work. It never has and never will. What works
is above average copy!
But until now, the only way to get above average copy is to invest
thousands of dollars to get a copywriter like myself to write it for you from scratch.
You, however, a small business owner, aspiring online marketer, or
even an intermediate marketer, as much as your heart desires, just can’t afford to spend that kind
of money right off the top.
Well my friend, things are about to change for you, starting right
Hi, my name is and I have made my clients hundreds of thousands of
dollars as one of Australia's leading direct response & direct mail marketers here in
I've helped business owner's double, triple and even quadruple the
response they get from the same advertising dollar.
And I've helped them save money on wasted advertising
So right now you have a prime opportunity. The opportunity that
your competitors won’t get.
The opportunity to transform your business into a money-making
machine that makes you money like clockwork.
Just how will this happen you ask?
I’ll tear your copy apart, line by line, from top to bottom for a mere fraction
of what I normally charge for copy from scratch.
Let’s not kid ourselves: You’re here for a reason and that reason is that
either, your current sales copy, ad or flyer isn’t making you any money or that you want to get
more out of it than you are right now.
Well, the fact of the matter is you won’t make any more money than
you are right now…..unless you get professional help.
I don’t care if you wrote it yourself. I don’t care if you paid
someone to write it for you. I don’t care what the circumstances are.
The fact is if it’s not working— it’s not working.
But the good news is right now I’m making it possible for you to
have a top-of-the-line, proven, globally recognized, and profit producing copywriter go above and
beyond the call of duty to ensure your product, service, or whatever it may be, SELLS.
But before I get into that any further, let’s talk
The difference a copy critique can make & why
YOU’VE got to have one.
The fact is you have less than 10 seconds to gain the attention on
visitors to your website or ad, and if you fail to do this then the chances of them sticking around
and actually buying from you just went down the toilet.
However, just changing your headline alone could instantly
increase your sales by 30% or more.
The problem, however, is YOU can’t do this all by yourself,
especially if writing compelling copy isn’t your forte. And judging by the fact you’re still on
this site proves you could use a helping hand.
But if you’re like most people, then I know the question rolling
around in your head right now is: What’s the difference between you doing it and letting me do
I’m glad you asked.
It’s because “I” know the outcome and you don’t. It’s sort of like
how a dentist knows exactly how your teeth will look once your tooth has been pulled. He knows this
because he’s seen it all, he’s pulled thousands of teeth, he knows which roots to look out for and
how the nerves inside the human mouth will react to certain movements, cuts, and
Well, the same principle applies with copy. I’ve been there, seen
it all and have worked with some of the most successful marketers on the planet for years, so I
know the pitfalls and what to say, what not to say, and how to say it.
You see, I have a proven 12-point copy critique
system that when applied, results in sales, which is what you want.
And at this stage in your business
- You just can’t take the “chance” that you’ll get it right
- You just can’t take the “chance” on saving money—just
1 wrong word could cost you thousands in lost conversions
- You just can’t take the “chance on using the wrong color
- You just can’t take the “chance” on poor choice of
- You just can’t take the “chance” on marketing techniques that
couldn’t sell a burger to a starving crowd
- You just can’t take the chance on sales copy where
the flow is jacked all the way up
- You just can’t take the “chance” with order pages and call to
actions that make no sense to no one except you
- You just can’t take the “chance” on fonts,
formatting, and general layouts that are all wrong for your product or
- But when you get an expert to look through
I’ll Show You How To TURN UP The
That’s right. I’ll walk you through how to…
- Profit on the frontend
- Profit on the upsell
- Profit on the cross sell
- Profit on the backend
- Profit all the way around
Now I know that up to this point, I’ve made a lot of promises and
you know a promise is nothing if you can’t back it up, so here goes:
Now it’s your turn….
A wise man once said everything that we have in life is a direct
result of the choices that we don’t make.
The choices that we don’t make are the ones that really matter.
You never hear anybody sitting in a nursing home at 80 years old talking about the mistakes of the
things that they did do in their life.
It’s always the regrets of the things that they didn’t do that
sadden them and depress them in their old age.
Are you ready to take the next step?
If you are then let me go into depth about….
My Copy Critiques
As I mentioned earlier, I have a 12-point can’t fail system that
when you do as I say guarantees that you’ll profit.
Well, let’s have a look at exactly what these points are and what
I’ll do for you.
1. I’ll rip your headline apart:
Often times marketers, maybe even you, leave this up to their graphic designer, who may not be
familiar with direct marketing concepts. Other times, marketers make up their own headline that
lacks the punch that it needs to instantly grab the attention of visitors to their
2. I’ll dissect your subheads: The rule of
thumb is that readers should be able to scroll and scan your headlines and sub headlines—even if
they don’t read anything else on the page, they should still know what you’re offering & be
compelled enough to take action. I’ll check to see if your copy does this.
3. I’ll tear your opening paragraph to pieces
too: This is where you absolutely MUST connect with the reader, letting him or her
know that you totally understand where they are, how they feel, and that you have the solution to
solve their problem. Miss this and your copy is sure to fail.
4. I’ll check for legit testimonials and proof
elements: There’s nothing more important than ensuring all of your proof elements are
incorporated and add up. Buyers are extremely savvy these days, so you’ll want to get everything
you can out of your testimonials, statistics and aspects of the sales copy you can use to give you
5. I’ll zero-in on your bullet points: In
many cases, bullets can make a huge difference to your success and allow you to highlight portions
of your copy and provides quick hits for readers – ultimately improving the odds prospects will
continue reading your copy.
6. I’ll clamp down on your USP like a
hawk: If you don’t have a unique selling point, then you’re throwing money down the
drain, plain and simple. The only way to reach your full potential is to be different than everyone
else out there. I’ll check to see if you have a unique twist that will attract a feeding frenzy of
7. I’ll shred your offer to pieces: Often
times I see many marketers struggling to make it clear exactly what they’re offering. Needless to
say that if YOU the product or service developer is confused, then the potential buyer is. But
don’t worry, I’ll inspect your offer to see if there’s anything out of place or unclear and tell
you what you need to do to fix it.
8. I’ll Inspect your persuasion
architecture: Just like your English teacher taught you that an essay has a certain
‘structure’ so does a sales letter.
9. I’ll double check your target market:
This is where a lot…I mean a lot of marketers and business owners go wrong. Targeting the wrong
crowd. This can make or break your campaigns, so in this stage, I’ll double check to ensure that
you’re reaching those whom you really want to reach.
10. I’ll study your order page: Your order
page is a sticky area, so you don’t want anything out of place here. Good for you that I’ve seen it
all, so I know exactly what should and should not be there. I’ll study your order page to ensure
you’re all good.
11. I’ll dissect your call to
action: If after reading your letter I don’t take the bait, chances are that
those in your market won’t either. I’ll give you several recommendations to ensure your call to
action hits emotional triggers that actually causes potential buyers to take action. A common flaw
that I’ve seen over the years is that many offers never ever ask the reader to buy.
12. I’ll tear your post script from the
inside-out: whether you know it or not, the P.S. is one of the most read parts of a
sales letter. However, it’s also a common area where many business owners goof up. I’ll tear you
post script up from the inside-out and check for things that you should and should not say to avoid
any possible goof-ups that can cost you a ton in sales.
I’ll do all of this for you for little of nothing, so you don’t
But It’s not how much work a person does, it’s the results that
count, which if you’re honest with yourself, is all you’re really interested in….the end
And I know it’s one thing for “me” to tell you about the results
you’ll receive, but I know that it sounds better coming from fellow business owners and marketers
just like you, so right now……
How Will This Work For You
Just imagine your product or service making
anywhere from 10% to 50% to 200% or 300% more sales than it does right now each and every
Just picture yourself the thriving business that you’ve always
known you could have.
Just think for a moment abouthow good life could be, knowing
you’re getting the most out of your offer while squeezing out every single cent that you truly
- The trips you could take
- The new car you could buy
- The dream home that you’ve been eying out
- The extra nights out treating your family to dinner
Well now you can have all of that and more…..PLUS throw in the
Your sales are virtually guaranteed
to come piling in…
Though I have absolutely no clue as to what it is you’re selling or offering, I’m so confident in
my experience, ability, and skill that right now I’m guaranteeing your success.
That’s right, I’m taking all of the risks away from you and
putting it on me, ensuring YOU profit.
If the recommendations I make don't boost your response rates
dramatically -- then your review is FREE!
Just show me what you did and what the results were, and if my
recommendations didn't produce for you, I'll insist that you let me refund all of your money
directly from my bank account. It’s just that simple.
The time to ACT is
Yes, Mark, Please have your office
contact me and schedule me in to have my sales copy reviewed as soon as possible. I
want to understand exactly how to improve my sales copy and communications in the
twelve critical areas.
YOU WILL BE CONTACTED WITHIN
Thanks for taking the time to read through this message and may
your sales copy begin attracting more customers
If you're uncertain, don't worry...that's a good thing. Think back
on everything you've done that was truly worthwhile in your life. I'm talking about things
like: asking that special someone on a date ... learning to swim ..showing up for the first
day of school ... getting married ... buying your first home ... having a child.
What do all these things have in common?
PPS: Now think about your normal daily
activities...things like: reading ... watching TV ... even attending a seminar ... I think you'll
agree that none of them are all that scary. In fact, they're probably downright
But I want you to ask yourself, "Where have these activities got
me so far?" My guess is you won't like the answer.
That's why my advice is that you follow your fear and take